Peer edits

hopkin's hustle story- Peter Ingles http://peterijournalism.blogspot.com/

Your lead is good and includes the 5 w's and h, the second paragraph/backup threw me off, I feel as though an explanation of the set up of games is a bit superfluous.
Places and dates are provided, but names of players and specific details haven't been mentioned yet. If you skipped right to that third paragraph or even shortened up this explanation a lot it would make the whole piece flow better.

graduation story- Jessica Karam http://jessicakaram.blogspot.com/

Your first sentence/two sentences don't really give the 5 w's/h information, you get to the point of the article in the middle of the first paragraph, you just need to flip this paragraph around. The second paragraph is good and answers the questions I had after reading the first paragraph.